The strengths of our scene is the action that accompanies the dialogue and the flow of our scene. We were able to create an image in our description of the setting and the action that is going on at each moment.
Our main weaknesses would be grammatical errors. Since we wanted to hurry and move our story along so that we could finish, we didn't go back and re-read our scenes, missing the errors that we made. At times we moved the story along a bit to fast, but overall we were able to make everything flow together nicely.
If we had to rewrite this scene, the improvements we would make would be to double check our work (of course!) and create more of a dialogue between Harry Claude and Oliver Basket once they initially get caught. The dialogue between them now is short and to the point, which is helpful to not make the story drag on, but since the rivalry between the two is so large I think the dialogue should show how proud Harry is to have caught Oliver and Oliver's passion for taking down the captiol.
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