Thursday, June 14, 2012

Blog #13- Script Frenzy Project Reflection Paper

                Oh Script Frenzy….What to say about Script Frenzy.  First thing’s first, I have never, EVER, written a 76 page ANYTHING in my entire short little life.  I was unbelievably proud of myself, and Lindsay, for all the hard work and effort we put in to creating our script.  When our class had originally discussed starting up Script Frenzy, I was a little apprehensive.  Writing a 100 page movie in a month?  No thank you.  I could barely write a 10 page paper without going crazy, writing 100 pages seemed out of my reach! 

Now that the project is done, I feel good.  Even though I know that the script isn't nearly as great as it could be (we didn't go through and spellcheck anything) I'm still proud that I was able to write as many pages as I did.  I felt accomplished, even though I may not have made it to 100 pages I got pretty darn close!  The time spent writing the script was very stressful and I was also looking for ways to up the page count.  Looking at my printed script and seeing just the magnitude that it is now makes me feel awesome, and proud of my work. 

The parts of the Script Frenzy Workbook that I thought was most helpful were the parts where we had to write scenes and the part where we had to plan out what was going to happen during the script.  I was able to create scene before we actually starting writing, so I was able to put those scene in without taking up any time writing them.  It saved time so that I could write other scenes.  I had wrote a version of the opening scene and the climax, both making it into the script with changes, but since I had the idea already down on paper it was easy to manipulate them to fit the current scene they were being placed in.

I don't know if I learned anything new about myself, just reinforcing was I had already known.  I take things way out of proportion.  If I said I was going to write a 100 page script and the day before it's due it's only at 70, I'll freak out.  Working with Lindsay made everything much easier and less stressful.  I was constantly worried if we'd finish in time, because though out the time we were writing in class we had discussions on how far other people were and that we were allowed to shorten it if needed.  I started having fun with what I was writing and the next thing I new I had just added about 5 pages; it made me feel good about my writing, even if the writing itself wasn't perfect. 

Our script is 76 pages! I'm totally proud of that.  Our original goal was 100, but once we realized that reaching that goal wasn't possible we modified our script to a manageable number.  When we reached that number and were finally done it was such a relief.  We didn't handle our time well in the beginning of the project, not taking it as seriously as we should have.  We were on the Internet and not writing at all.  That didn't last too long mind you, we only had a month to do this!  Soon we had a pattern of switching who wrote every day.  One day I would write and the next Lindsay would write.  The system worked well, because we knew it would be too difficult to collaborate on our writing.  The only down side to what we did was that we sometimes had a repeat of a scene, or the same basic scene with some major differences.  Once we only had a few days left we assigned page numbers to what we had to write each night in order to complete our script.  It worked, but it was super stressful during that time.  We were able to finish our script within one month, though we could have taken some stress off ourselves if we had been more focused in the beginning.

I'm proud of the entire script!! The part I'm most proud of would have to be the adventures Oliver and Jack embarked on and writing about the interesting people they met.  They were stuck in scenarios that were challenging for them and met some pretty strange people; that was fun to write about.  I'm really proud of the entire script, from beginning to end. Some parts moved much quicker than others-the end-but overall the work and effort put into finishing the script was great. 

The places that need improvement in the script is the ending.  It moved fast.  We spent so much time building up to the climax that when we reached it we had to write it fast and move on.  We got to the climax late in the month so we didn't have much time to write the ending.  I think in general our ending is good and follows what we had planned out well, but we don't have all the description we had in the beginning of the story.  


If we had more time to work on our script, we would go through it with a fine tooth comb and fix any errors we found.  We would focus our time on cleaning up parts that are repeated or seem messy and make sure the story has a nice flow, something that you can follow easily without any confusion.  Parts of our script were slightly repeated, so we would go back and take those repeats out while adding in new information that got left behind.  


Overall I enjoyed writing my script and was able to have a fun time while doing it.  The plot of our script isn't something that I would normally go for, so being able to write something new was a great experience.   

Tuesday, June 12, 2012

Blog #12- Reflection of scene

The strengths of our scene is the action that accompanies the dialogue and the flow of our scene.  We were able to create an image in our description of the setting and the action that is going on at each moment.

Our main weaknesses would be grammatical errors. Since we wanted to hurry and move our story along so that we could finish, we didn't go back and re-read our scenes, missing the errors that we made.  At times we moved the story along a bit to fast, but overall we were able to make everything flow together nicely.

If we had to rewrite this scene, the improvements we would make would be to double check our work (of course!) and create more of a dialogue between Harry Claude and Oliver Basket once they initially get caught. The dialogue between them now is short and to the point, which is helpful to not make the story drag on, but since the rivalry between the two is so large I think the dialogue should show how proud Harry is to have caught Oliver and Oliver's passion for taking down the captiol.

Thursday, April 26, 2012

Blog #11 Action and Description

HARRY
INT. HARRY IS IN THE SECURITY ROOM IN THE CAPITAL BUILDING, WATCHING THE SCREENS. JACKS LOCATION CATCHES HIS EYE.
Cynthia, order Jack to report to the capital building at once.  He was pin-pointed in an area of interest for Oliver.
CYNTHIA
WALKING INTO THE ROOM AT A HURRIED PACE.
Yes sir, I'll ping him immediately.
(move forward in time to Jacks arrival)
JACK
WALKING INTO HARRY CLAUDE'S OFFICE.
Hello sir, how may I be of assistance today?
HARRY
SITTING AT HIS CHAIR, THEN STANDING UP TO WALK TO JACK.
Take a seat Jack.  Why were you in the Keeper woods this afternoon?  I'm aware you like to take walks on the outskirts of it, but you had ventured pretty deep today.
JACK
LOOKING AROUND THE ROOM, FOCUSING ON STAYING CALM.
Oh, just exploring new territory I suppose.  I wasn't aware that I was in a danger zone?
HARRY
LOOKING DOWN AT JACK.
Non sense, it's just an area of interest to the capital is all.  You didn't see anything on your walk did you?
JACK
RESPONDES. LOOKS LIKE HE'S IN THOUGHT, RESPONDES AGAIN.
Nope. (waits a few seconds) Well I did see a few rabbits who looked pretty lost, I almost took them home!
HARRY
SPEAKING IN A FATHERLY TONE.
That's nice Jack.
JACK
LOOKS AT THE DOOR
Is that all you needed from me today?
HARRY
APPEARING MENACING TO JACK.
Yes Jack, you are free to go.  We will be keeping a very close eye on you though.  Be aware of that the next time you venture too deep into the Keeper Woods.
JACK
OBLIVIOUS TO THE WARNING HARRY JUST GAVE HIM.
Will do sir.  Have a nice day sir, Cynthia.
CYNTHIA
Goodbye Jack.

(after Jack leaves)

HARRY
APPEARING FRUSTRATED
You can never tell when that boy is lying I tell you, he's just so foolish.
CYNTHIA
APPEARING CONFUSED.
Are you saying that you don't believe him?
HARRY
PACING AROUND AND PULLING AT HIS BLONDE HAIR
I'm not sure; either way I want the best swat team to go and search around that area that Jack was located in.  I want this to be done tomorrow, do you understand.
CYNTHIA
ON HER WAY TO THE DOOR
Yes sir, of course.  I'll assemble the team right away.

JACK
SCURRING DOWN THE HALLWAY AFTER LISTENING TO HARRY'S ORDERS TO CYNTHIA.
Oh no!
CONTEMPLATING WHAT HE SHOULD DO FOR A MOMENT WHEN HE IS OUT OF THE CAPITAL
I need to go tell my friend!
KNOWING THAT IF HE SAID OLIVER'S NAME HE WOULD GET THEM BOTH KILLED.

Wednesday, April 25, 2012

Blog #10 Moving the Story Forward

HARRY
Cynthia, order Jack to report to the capital building at once.  He was pin-pointed in an area of interest for Oliver.
CYNTHIA
Yes sir, I'll ping him immediately.
(move forward in time to Jacks arrival)
JACK
Hello sir, how may I be of assistance today?
HARRY
Take a seat Jack.  Why were you in the Keeper woods this afternoon?  I'm aware you like to take walks on the outskirts of it, but you had ventured pretty deep today.
JACK
Oh, just exploring new territory I suppose.  I wasn't aware that I was in a danger zone?
HARRY
Non sense, it's just an area of interest to the capital is all.  You didn't see anything on your walk did you?
JACK
Nope. (waits a few seconds) Well I did see a few rabbits who looked pretty lost, I almost took them home!
HARRY
(speaking in an fatherly tone)
That's nice Jack.
JACK
Is that all you needed from me today?
(looks at the door)
HARRY
Yes Jack, you are free to go.  We will be keeping a very close eye on you though.  Be aware of that the next time you venture too deep into the Keeper Woods.
JACK
Will do sir.  Have a nice day sir, Cynthia.
CYNTHIA
Goodbye Jack.

(after Jack leaves)

HARRY
You can never tell when that boy is lying I tell you, he's just so foolish.
CYNTHIA
Are you saying that you don't believe him?
HARRY
I'm not sure; either way I want the best swat team to go and search around that area that Jack was located in.  I want this to be done tomorrow, do you understand.
CYNTHIA
Yes sir, of course.  I'll assemble the team right away.

JACK
(scurrying down the hallway after listening to Harry's orders to Cynthia)
Oh no!
(contemplating what he should do for a moment)
I need to go tell my friend! (he doesn't dare say Oliver's name in the Capital building, that would for sure get them both killed.)

Blog #9 Dialogue Relationship

JACK
So, what's the plan?
OLIVER
What plan? What are you talking about Jack.
JACK
You know, the plan you have to over throw Harry.  The one where we get to be the heros, the big guys on campus the-
OLIVER
Ok! I get it! I don't have one either.
JACK
What do you mean you don't have one. You need to have one! We won't be able to do this without a plan! Or more people! What are we going to do? How will this work? This is never going to work, thats how.
(he starts pacing around in Olivers small living room, the dog following him)
OLIVER
Stop! Your making my damn dog dizzy!
 (looks at the dog who's lying in a heep on the floor looking dazed)
What we need is a few trustworthy people and a good plan, now let's get down to it.
JACK
Okay! Whatever you say, you know I'll agree with you. You just tell me what to do; I'll do it.
OLIVER
And that needs to stop. You need to form your own mind, Jack.  You are a trustful person and it's an admirable trait but you let people walk all over you too often because of that.
JACK
I'll try my best to stop?
OLIVER
Just try to be you!

Sunday, April 22, 2012

Blog #7 The Hollywood Formula

Opening Scene:
The start of the movie is of the camera zooming in on a bright and sunny forest.  As the camera goes in deeper we see a small wood cabin buried deep in the woods.  Throughout this time there is suspenseful music playing softly in the back round.  The camera goes through the front door that has been left open and focus' on an older man writing in a worn looking journal, the last action of the opening scene is the man looking up into the camera and the screen going black with a "boom".




Inciting Incident:
 During this time we see Jack starting to take a walk in the Keeper woods, the area in which Oliver lives hidden in his cabin. Jack has been fascinated with the woods for some time now and has finally decided to venture into this unknown area. Meanwhile, back at the headquarters of the Dewian government, Harry and Cynthia have been watching Jack through the tracker that was placed in his forehead when he was regenerated.  Jack’s venture into the woods lands him near a wooden cabin-the secret home of Oliver.  Jack, being the nosy person he is, walks right up to the front door and starts knocking on the door.  Oliver loads his gun, opens the door and aims to shoot at his intruder.   Jack is very insistent and Oliver finally realizes that he truly is no harm.  Moving forward we see Jack and Oliver talking about the government, Oliver being surprisingly open on his opinion even though Jack has told him that he is a police officer.  Oliver makes it clear that Jack is a fool for believing anything that the government tells him, something that’s been in the back of his mind for some time now.  Moving back to Harry and Cynthia, they check up on Jack and see that he is in a red zone-an area of interested for Oliver.  They transport him into the building and ask him questions about what is in that area.  Jack catches sight of a picture of Oliver and decides to lie about what is in the area; Harry decides to check it out anyways the following day.  When Jack is released from the building he immediately goes to Oliver to warn him of the oncoming government and offers him a safe, secret place to stay further in the woods in a cave.  Oliver realizes that this and decides that he can trust Jack in his planned revolution.   



The Big Decision:
Revolving around Jack, the big decision come after Oliver and Jack have official met on the day that Jack accidentally discovered Oliver secret dwelling.  While being a surprisingly good host and making his guest tea, Oliver is having an internal debate on whether or not to tell Jack about his plans for revolution.  "He's a damn police officer!."  "He doesn't know any better!"  These are the two thoughts that keep running through his mind.  By the time he gives Jack his tea it's been over ten minutes.  Oliver decides that he really doesn't know any better and throws caution to the wind, telling him of his thoughts and how wrong the government of Dewy truly is.  This involves Jack being called a "fool" more than once and Oliver using the word "damn" every thirteen words.  The day ends with Jack going home only to be called into the Capital building by none other than Harry Claude himself.  As he enter Harry's office he is bombarded with questions,  "Where were you today?"  "How did you know how far you were into the woods", and the most important question, "Did you see anyone in the woods?"  Jack knew that Oliver was being searched for; his picture was everywhere.  His internal debate was whether or not to turn him in.  The entire time he was with him, he denied was Oliver said, stating that it wasn't true, but now? In a snap decision he states, "I didn't see anything except for a few rabbits running around."  The next scene Oliver opens his front door to Jack standing there.  The first words out of his mouth are, "I want to help you, but we need to leave now."





Friday, April 20, 2012

Blog #8 Dialogue

1.  Speak your dialogue, while you're writing mouth you're dialogue over and over.

2.  Be able to identify each character by what they are saying.  Each one should have it's own mannerisms and sound different from the others.

3.  Make a "supercharged atmosphere".  Putting two characters who would do anything to avoid each other together makes it seem like the author isn't getting in the way and that you're eavesdropping.